Please rewrite this Memo and letter with thsi instructions.
Memo/Letter Make-Over Assignment
PURPOSE
This assignment will improve your composing and editing skillsregarding crafting routine business documents. It will also sharpenyour critical analysis abilities.
PROCEDURE
You will be given a document that is poorly written. It will beabout three-fourths to a page.
Consider the documentâs purpose and audience. Analyze itsstrengths and weaknesses.
Rewrite the document, applying the principles of good businesswriting and document design that you are learning in thiscourse.
On a separate sheet, explain your rationale for making thechanges. Include your observations about the audience, stated (andunderlying) purpose(s), relationship between reader(s) and writer,organizational setting, appropriate tone, level of formality, useof jargon, and any other reasons for the changes.
WHAT TO SUBMIT
Your revised typed memo or letter
Your written analysis and rationale for eachdocument
Graded Memo Rewrite/Makeover
This assignment will be graded. Please rewrite usingcorrect writing style, tone, grammar mechanics, etc. Include youranalysis of the errors you found on a separate page.
Your staff does not like the idea of working at a distant campuson Thursdays, and you have to get them on board with this newmandated change. So, you wrote this Memo below:
To: AllStaff
Subject: Thursday Work Days at Eldridge
Date: Februay 11,2015
From: Your name, Superviser
We have had lot of people not following directions about thework day on Thursdays. All staff is to be working on the Eldridgecampus henceforth on Thursdays. You are to follow directions;disobeyance willnot be tolerated by anyone. Unless you have priorpermission to be at another campus you are to be on this campus onThursdays. The work hours are from 9am to 6pm with one hour forlunch. If you donât abide by these directives you will be writtenup by me. When you are there you should check for neededimprovements or items or things missing to enhance this campus inaddition to using his time for planning and doing your worktask.
Bring your own latops as there is no extra computers at Elridge.The ones that are there are for that staff there.
Thanks and do adhere to these directives.
Sincerely
Your Name
Graded Letter Rewrite/Makeover
Please rewrite using correct writing style, tone,grammar mechanics, etc. Construct a letterhead. Include youranalysis of the errors you found on a separate page.
You work for McDonough Company, 2550 Lockwood Plaza, Beechnut,OH 43443. As the SeniorManager, you ordered 14 new HP laptopcomputers for your senior staff. They were to arrive on Monday,January 19, 2015, but you have not received them. You called butwere told the same thingâthey are on their way. So you decided towrite the letter below.
February 11, 2015
HP Company
1440 Jones Road
Houston, TX 77033
Dear Sir
I have called your office several times and got no satisfactionI sent you a check in the amount of
$16, 689.12 for 14 Hp Model 745 laptop computer. To date, I havenot received them, and I am rather upset to say the least. The copyof my check is attached.
Your company has a good reputation but now I am questioning thatreputation. Why tell me my computers are on the way with no date ofarrival. Yet, when I contacted your Company about this order, P. O.No. 1276 I am told that they were shipped. Well if they wereshipped then why have I not received them?
I want an explanation by phone; my number is 704.678.9112. Iwant an answer no later than February 16 or I will contact mylawyer. I have ordered from your company before and have beensatisfied.
What do I have to do to get these laptops? Is it possible theywere sent else where or were stolen?
This situation has been truly annoying for the staff expectingthese laptops as well as for my business.
I want to here from you.
Regards
Your Name
Senior manager
