Avoid redundancies young in age baby kitten . Use active constructions: convert passive to active; no expletives. There were accusations from parents = parents accused her . She was arrested by marshall george herrick, who, shackling her, drove her to salem. Village for her trial = marshall george herrick shackled, arrested and drove her to. Respond to other reviewers at certain points - but don"t review their review. Have two paraphrases of an assertion made by other reviews and two quotations from each reviewer. Get evidence from details in the film. Dialogue, performances, direction, editing, genre (films that play with the conventions of a genre) Plot summary is for the intro only. It doesn"t commit to a genre: dark comedy, satire, road movie of family dysfunction, indie/aesthetic, Timeworn convention: hollywood movie with family is important moral. It doesn"t fully commit to the dark comedy genre because of its hollywood cliches.